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You crossed the line
So now its time
You flood my room
with that horrid gloom

I think i might die
and you know why?
Its this constant pain
thats always the same

You cause it all
You hurt us all
And you dont give a fuck
Now im out of luck

My time runs out
Drained by yours
Thats why i shout
Yes, thats why i shout
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i wrote this one on paper, and was gonna leave for my mum to find, she smokes a lot, and i think im allerigc to it because it makes me ill, and she doesnt seem to care how its affecting me

i didnt leave it because part of it sounds like a suicide note and id rather not ahve her screaming that i should go ahead and do it to make her feel better, cos i know she would say that...

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:iconmickarina:
I read all of your poems, and I like the fact that I can fit them all to music in my head. Especially this one. They're very rythmic and emotional.
:icondarkpoetpop:
thanks :)

im actually thinking about trying to write music for some of them because i learning to play the guitar recently

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life is a bag of shit at times, just use it to grow flowers =D
:iconmickarina:
Really? Awesome. n_n You'll have to record some of you playing and let me hear it. My brothers play guitar, but I can barely play. Most I can get out is that little bull-fighting mantra. lol
:icondarkpoetpop:
well i only just started learning mid autumn and im self teaching, so im not that good but i get better every week

and if i ever do write a good tune that goes with a poem ill record it for ya =)

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life is a bag of shit at times, just use it to grow flowers =D
:iconmickarina:
Well I'll just wait pateintly until then. ^.^
:icondarkpoetpop:
might be a while, i think i need to learn how to play good songs before i can write any of my own, because if i cant play others how am i gonna play my own? xD

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life is a bag of shit at times, just use it to grow flowers =D
:iconmickarina:
I like that song "Word Best Friend Become Redefined" by Chiodos. The intro is awesome. ^.^ It would be hard to play though...

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